Action Story Opening

This is a short story opening that I wrote as an example of how much description and advanced vocabulary (such as the word ‘sodden’) you can add into an opening. Of course, you can add in lots more similes, metaphors and other descriptive elements than I haven’t included here. This just serves as an example of what you can do if you have a good idea and let your imagination flow.

Of course, don’t copy it, but feel free to borrow some ideas, interesting words, and phrases to add to your writing.

I walked down the edge of the deserted road, my clothes sodden and my hands trembling. It was midnight and the full moon was throwing dim, silver light everywhere, so it was impossible to not be seen. As much as I wanted to race off, I had to stay quiet so that I would have less chance of being caught. My brain was screaming silently at me to turn around and look but I just couldn’t bring myself to do it. Suddenly, I heard the sound of the officer’s boots slamming into the ground with every step he took. I had to go. Trying to be as quiet as I could, I ran off into the field adjacent to the road I was on just mere seconds before. Thankfully, I made it just in time, and the officer walked straight past me without a glance.

I was safe for the time being, however I didn’t know what was to come.